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Lynn Cady's avatar

This story has sucked me in already. Your writing style is so clean and dense. Almost like poetry. You never waste a word. Unlike most writing on Substack! Most of it is so wordy and repetitive that I quickly give up. But I'm invested in this story. I'm worried about Ali getting enough sun now that the window is tinted. Looking forward to Thursday.

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Joseph Silver's avatar

Very strong piece. I look forward to reading the remaining chapters. The windows of the lethal pickup truck are tinted, then later the narrator tints the windows of his apartment as well. It's a symbol of the world closing in around him. All he has left is that damn alligator, sent to him by a distant cousin no less! The details and digressions draw the reader deeper into the story rather than obfuscate. I couldn't find a single wasted word. My only comment is I wonder whether the alligator should be inside the cabin of the car during the accident. It might enhance the bond between narrator and alligator if they share that near-fatal experience. On the other hand, it would be strange to bring an alligator to one's graduation.

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