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Lynn Cady's avatar

That's a nice detailed description of rat poop.

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Ruben Bix's avatar

Thanks. How about my rat poop drawing?

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Lynn Cady's avatar

Well, I totally missed that, but it's extremely realistic

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Ruben Bix's avatar

When I read your recent post with the description of rats bullying the poor little mice with cudgels or whips or just generally being mean to them in the barn it bothered me that your rat story was so much more colorful and interesting than my rat poop was and I saw it just a day or so before I was going to post this. You'd scooped me. Still, it was too late to change my rat poop in any significant way so I left it in.

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DF's avatar

not unlike a lot of my dreams, minutely detailed, absurd depictions of frustration, though I may be confusing it with my waking life. Who can tell?

learned a new word, kinesics.

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Ruben Bix's avatar

Thanks for saying this, about the dreams. Yes, the skeleton for this story was a dream. I say skeleton because I had to put some flesh on it. I could only remember the barest details of the dream but while writing I felt like I was redreaming it in a way and now I'm doing a series of these and this story was the prototype. And yes, waking life is also frustrating.

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Rollo La Rue's avatar

Adored by women, admired by men, but shoeless. In any event, you kept your pants on.

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Ruben Bix's avatar

Ha. You mean my unnamed protagonist kept his pants on.

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Rollo La Rue's avatar

Sorry, it has a distinct autobiographical flavor.

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Mia Kirsi Stageberg's avatar

Captivating. The movement's surrealism, mixed with formal elegance and the daring superciliousness of the narrator, feel to me like deconstruction of many 19th-century novels I grew up on. It's balletic!

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Ruben Bix's avatar

Yes, well said. Thank you for seeing into him. He's very much wants to have significance though nothing seems to be working.

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