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Mark D's avatar

Yes, “that’s usually the way it goes”. Loquacity rules the day.

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Ruben Bix's avatar

Right now I'm thinking thinking thinking that The Scorpion is an almost perfect short story but I'm also worrying worrying worrying that the punctuation police might come and arrest me.

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Mark D's avatar

You better watch out for the Reiterate Police while you’re at it .

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Mark D's avatar

They’ll give you two or three citations at the same time.

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Ruben Bix's avatar

And I'll be sure to remind them:

This ain't journalism, an essay, or informational writing of any kind.

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Ruben Bix's avatar

As long as they aren't working undercover...

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Lynn Cady's avatar

I like the way your main character ignores the fact he has released a creature capable of inflicting horrible deaths and rides off to a winery.

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Ruben Bix's avatar

He's unimpressed by warning signs, no panic about a big earthquake, the scorpion's worrisome but his wife says it's no big deal, etc. etc. The immediate and most important issue is the deadline. All these compartmentalizations feel very real to me.

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Lynn Cady's avatar

Yes! It's a variation of the trying to meet the deadline but facing constant trivial distractions dream theme.

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Ruben Bix's avatar

I'm wondering if anyone noticed the camouflaged faces the extra bugs, the miniature people, a little car in the illustration... (I go to such lengths for my readers, and then... sheesh.)

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